Suzana's Fanfiction

The Next Life of "Friends"

"Friends" a comedy series about a group of close friends and how they tackle life. But in this story the characters are reborn. Although some parts of their original characteristics still remain.

Monica and Phoebe are sisters. Rachel is their cousin and is now engaged to Ross. She met him while on holiday in London. Joey however lives by himself around the same neighborhood. And Chandler couldn't quite make it...  

“Phoebe! Phoebe!”

The sound of the curtains being pulled back came like a thunder cracking in broad daylight. Opening my eyes I could see Monica staring down at me.

“Hurry up will you. You only have a few hours till they get here,”said Monica.

Rubbing my eyes to adjust to the bright light that shone in them, I got up and headed for the bathroom. While in there, I could hear Monica noisily setting up utensils in the kitchen. I could picture her labelled containers  all done up in a single file like a row of soldiers awaiting her commands all ready to dive into her cooking.  She had everything  planned out for cousin Rachel and her fiancee Ross.

“Hey would you be able to look out for this while it cooks. I’ll be right back,” Monica said as I stepped into the kitchen.

I starred at the pot. It must feel so hot sitting there so still and having to go through all that heat just to have  people eat out of it.

“Oh you poor thing, you must be boiling in suffocation,” I empathized with it and took it off the stove.  

The door bell rang.

I went to get the door with a smile of immense glee on my face. “Aww... look at you,” said Rachel . “So glad to see you again too!” I said excitedly. I hugged Rachel and Ross.

Rachel and Ross made their way indoors. I shut the door behind me but it bounced back like someone had just pushed it. I held the door just in time before it hit me on the face. I looked outside but could see nothing that could possibly prevent it from closing. I walked back in to shut it again. But this time a gust of wind came in  and blew the vase off the coffee table. It fell with a clatter but did not break.

“Who is that?” I called out, not knowing what I expected to hear.

Out of the blue a foggy figure came before my eyes, bobbing up an down in mid air. It gave me the shivers. I looked up at it and froze at the spot. I could hear Rachel’s laughter coming from the kitchen. It sounded like they were all engrossed in a delightful conversation and here  I was,  couldn't even move an inch of my body. The foggy figure circulated around me. It had no face just a hallow foggy shape with smoke like substance whirling about. I really wished it would just leave.

I started to feel my brain becoming cold as ice. I shut my eyes tight. I could hear a soft murmur. I tried listening closely.

 The voice said,“My name is Chandler, you may not remember me. You and I were very good friends. Monica was my wife. We used to have this whole group of friends,”it said as if laughing at that fact.

Closing my eyes even tighter I asked, “ Why aren’t you with us in this life, Chandler?” How do I  remember you, I can’t even see your face.”

“Well that is true, Phoebe. Now I want you to concentrate hard on what I show you and you will be able to see your past life," replied Chandler.

 My head started spinning and in came an image of a whole group of people, in it were three guys, one I could recognize as Ross and the other looked like the guy who lived across the street from us.

“The next guy is me,” said Chandler’s voice. As if he just read my train of thoughts on what I was seeing.

He then went on to tell me why he had no physical  body and lived a partial life. It all happened on one very unfortunate day, when returning from work he had been kidnapped and stabbed to death by a lose serial killer. It was his most terrifying moment.

“I could only picture Monica, the way she looked on her wedding day. She gave me strength and hope to let go of my body and now here I am in the form of spirit only,” a sense of sadness took over his voice.

“I can’t live and I can’t die completely but I just wanted you all to know Pheobs, that I will always be looking over you. My heart still weeps in separation and I still long to be part of a family again,” his voice became shaky. As though invisible tears had flooded his non existent eyes, he became silent.

I consoled Chandler and told him that it was best he moved into the spirit world. Once we completed our present life we were going to join him and that it was just only a matter of time. Hearing this he became content with his situation. The living room door opened itself and I felt Chandler move out.

I never mentioned Chandler’s presence to anyone. It was best untold. The past was gone and now it was a new life, a new beginning.



Sarah's Fanfiction - Wydra

The Inheritance Cycle – Christopher Paolini
These books follow a teenage boy, Eragon, who while hunting in the Spine discovers a sapphire stone. When the stone hatches and revels a baby dragon his life changes. His uncle Garrow is murdered by the Ra’zac and Eragon runs off with the village storyteller Brom, who turns out to be a Dragon Rider of old. Eragon joins the rebel army, theVarden, and then travels to the elf’s capital to be trained; here he discovers another Dragon Rider and dragon, Oromis and Glaedr. It is Eragon’s destiny to stop the dark king Galbatorix. He finds his half brother Murtagh and he learns that Brom is really his father. Murtagh is captured by the king, before Eragon knows he is his half brother and after they have become good friend. His masters are killed by Murtagh at Gil’ead… The last book hasn’t been published yet so for how it finishes...

Wyrda

The pain and anger in Brom’s heart were still as strong as the day in which he had lost his beloved Saphira. He had a new plan. He was going to have revenge on the one who had torn part of his being away. All he had to do was wait for her to come back, to show herself to him. Brom was going to seduce Morzan’s love, and then… Do what was needed to be done. That had been before he had unexpectedly fallen deeply in love with Selena, Morzan’s Black Hand and lover. In the short time when Selena was at the estate they would show their love for each other, in whatever way they could.

After three years of being the gardener in the castle gardens, Brom left. He had received news from the Varden that a scholar in Teirm had discovered some important information about Galbatorix’s palace in Uru’baen. Information that would hopefully help them to steal the last three dragon eggs. So after making excuses to the other servants of Morzan, Brom gathered his belongings and horse. He rode up the Spine mountain range and then on to the port city of Teirm. It took three days for Brom to arrive in Teirm, as he had to avoid the king’s men every few leagues. Then he had to find Joed, the Scholar. The two men had quickly become good friends.

The information Joed had was indeed very useful. He had discovered a secret entrance to Galbatorix’s castle, through some ancient elven tunnels - tunnels that had been long forgotten by everything other than the ancient plans and books that the scholar had somehow managed to obtain. They had then hired a man, who had promised alliance, to secretly enter the castle and steal the dragon eggs back from the King. Unfortunately things hadn’t quite gone to plan. Hefring, the man that had been hired to get the eggs, had only got one of the eggs and then he had run off. He ran from both the empire and the Varden. Angery and annoyed, Brom and Joed went in chase of the man, hoping to get the dragon egg back before Morzan got it. When they eventually found him Hefring was dead, by the hand of Morzan, who now had the dragon egg. Gil’ead was alive with the sounds of battle.

Brom had only three things on his mind; one get the egg; two kill Morzan; and three go and get Selena to take her hand in marriage. He and Joed had become separated. Brom now faced Morzan, his old idol. The rider who had killed his Dragon, Saphira. The man who had his love. The swords Undbitr and Zar’roc clashed, sending blue and red sparks into the air. Morzan’s blood red dragon flicked out his tail trying to trip Brom, giving Morzan an advantage and he knocked Undbitr out of Brom’s hand. Brom quickly ducked away from the fatal thrusts of Morzan’s blade.
“Was it you that made my Black Hand disappear?” yelled Morzan.
Brom was taken aback. Selena’s disappeared? “No, I know nothing of what has happened to her!!” Brom replied.

Morzan charged Brom again. Brom kicked out, knocking Zar’roc from Morzan’s grip at the same time as breaking his hand. The two riders rolled around on the ground trying to get the upper hand. Brom saw Zar’roc. He shoved Morzan off him and grabbed the ruby blade. Morzan charged again, and froze. There was a roar from the large red dragon. Morzan stumbled backwards then fell over. Blood gurgled from his mouth and he blinked. Then he was still never to move again. Brom stepped forward and pulled the blade out of his enemy’s chest.

Then the red dragon was above him. “Kill me, Rider. Kill me so I can be with my Rider!!” the dragon said in a deep booming voice that filled Brom’s head. There was pain in the voice, pain that Brom was familiar with. The dragon stood still as Brom turned and looked at him, and with a quick stab of the sword the dragon had gone to join his Rider. Brom grabbed the sapphire egg, which reminded him painfully of Saphira’s when he had first been given it. Undbitr was nowhere to be seen. So Brom took Zar’roc sheath off its previous owner and donned it. Now to get his love, to see what had happened.

Brom arrived at the estate and forced his way inside. “Selena? Where is Selena?” He asked the first servant he came across.
The servant looked at Brom with sad eyes. “The mistress has past into the void.”
“What?” Brom yelled. It wasn’t true it couldn’t be true!!
“Just this morn…” Brom ran down the corridors of the castle until he found the room in which lay his love. He begged the healers to tell what had been wrong.

“No… It can’t…” Brom spluttered, figuring out what had happened. Brom went to Selena and knelt down beside her and whispered. “I promise I will not let anything happen to our child. I will keep it safe from the Empire.” He kissed her frozen lips and felt his heart break. For the second time in his life he had lost someone who he held dear.

Brom then travelled to where he knew Selena would take the child. And sure enough, in the village of Carvahall, with his Uncle and Aunt, lived Brom’s only child. After talking with a few of the villages Brom discovered the boy’s name. Eragon. The name of the first rider.

“Wyrda.” Brom whispered after seeing Eragon’s gedwey ignasia, 14 years later. “It’s cursed fate that makes me break my promise…” He watched as Eragon disappeared down the snow covered road towards his farm.

The Ancient Language

Gedwey ignasia – The silver mark of a Dragon Rider, normally on the palm.
Wyrda – Fates

Jenna Wyllie's Fanfiction - The Mentalist

The Mentalist – TV Series based around Patrick Jane who pretended to be a Psychic who could talk to the other side and assisted police departments with solving murders. He gets involved in a serial killer case of Red John, who Jane slanders on a talk show. Red John kills his Wife and Daughter because of this. After spending some time in a psychiatric Hospital after their murders, Jane comes and works as a consultant for the CBI. He uses his natural abilities of reading people and observing to solve murders and hopes to find Red John along the way and make him pay for what he has done.

The Mentalist - Red Murder

Someone who uses mental

acuity, hypnosis and/or

suggestion.

A master manipulator

of thoughts and behavior.

Sacramento, California, USA

It is a dark, cold and quiet night. A young girl yells and swears in anguish, while running out the door. A father grown old before his time is pained from what she has said, but proceeds to run after her. The girl runs, stumbling along the footpath in an emotional state. Crying she cannot see where she is going. As she looks back to see her father racing after her, a figure from out behind the bushes stabs the girl in the abdomen. She makes no sound, just looks shocked and confused as she falls to the ground. Her father catching up, does not see the figure in the shadows. All he sees is his daughter laying there close to deaths arms. "Darlene" he cries out like a wounded wolf, as he bends down to cradle her. The same figure from out of bushes then comes from behind and stabs the father as he holds his only piece of family, now gone in his arms.

Once in daylight, a beautiful tree lined neighborhood with middle classed homes is no longer as it seems. The sidewalk is closed off with yellow police tape, surrounded by police forensic teams and local police department squad cars. The whole CBI team Agent Lisbon, Cho, Rigsby, Van Pelt and followed at the rear by Jane come onto the scene. The sheriff of Sacramento District Police Department George Tullman lifts up the tape as they all gather round looking over the bodies.

Sheriff Tullman bends down and points to each body, identifying their wounds.

"Young Girl, fifteen, Darlene Fitzgerald, single wound to the abdomen, no other injuries appear to be present." "Middle aged man, Forty Six, Bruce Fitzgerald, single wound to the lower back and no other injuries appear to be present."

"Father and Daughter, here I'm afraid." Sheriff Tullman turns to look at Lisbon who’s in charge. "Are you aware of any witnesses?" Lisbon waits for his answer showing impatience she continues."Have any neighbors been spoken to so far?"

"No Ma'am, it’s all been crazy hectic here this morning, had no chance." Tullman's Texas drawl is very prominent when he doesnt like to be questioned.

"Okay, well will be taking over the investigation from now on." Lisbon looks sternly at Tullman, while his face changes to disappointment.

As everyone moves off to the side, Jane comes in for a closer look. He notes to himself the position the bodies are in and their wounds. He then stands back and inspects the area, looking back towards the houses across the street. A woman quickly steps back from the window where she had been spying from. Jane now knows where to start.

Lisbon starts giving orders to the guys to stay on the scene to collect evidence.

“Jane, you and me,” Lisbon looks around for Jane.

“Christ’s sake Jane,” Lisbon grumbles when she sees Jane walking to the house across the road. Lisbon has to run over to catch up before he goes in alone.

“Haven’t I told you not to go ahead without me," Lisbon growls at Jane.

Jane gives Lisbon a cheeky smirk and is about to make a snarky comment when the door opens.

“Ahh, hi there. Can I help you two?” A women in her late forties stands in the doorway defensively blocking them from coming inside.

“I’m Detective Lisbon and this is Patrick Jane, we’re here with the CBI investigating the murders that happened across the street. May we come in?”

The woman hesitates looking back into the house, but proceeds to open the door to her slightly shambled home and motions them over to the front sitting room.

“Sorry, I didn’t catch your name Mrs?” Lisbon notes down as she speaks.

“Margaret Fisher.”

“Mrs Fisher did you know the Fitzgerald family?” Lisbon puts on her concerned face.

“Yes, what a horrible thing to happen. A lovely family they were,” the woman continues in a soft voice.

“Did you know them well?” Lisbon asks.

“When Mrs Fitzgerald was around she was well liked in the community, a good mother.” Mrs Fisher trys to sound genuine.

Jane watches her body language carefully; her hands clasped in her lap. Wandering around the living room, Jane trys to take the Fisher’s personas in.

“Could I quickly use your bathroom Mrs Fisher?” Jane stands at the corridor ready to head to the back of the house.

“I haven’t gotten round to cleaning this morning.” Mrs Fisher starts to look anxious.

“Ohh I won’t judge, I promise” Jane smiles and heads down without waiting for her permission.

Lisbon, now annoyed, has to keep Mrs Fisher talking so Jane can snoop around the house. She starts to look up from her notes to continue with Mrs Fisher.

"Was around?" Lisbon falters.

Lisbon was too slow this time, Mrs Fisher already had a revolver pointed at her.

Sarah's Fanfiction - Wydra. Third draft

The Inheritance Cycle – Christopher Paolini
These books follow a teenage boy, Eragon, who while hunting in the Spine discovers a sapphire stone. When the stone hatches and revels a baby dragon his life changes. His uncle Garrow is murdered by the Ra’zac and Eragon runs off with the village storyteller Brom, who turns out to be a Dragon Rider of old. Eragon joins the rebel army, theVarden, and then travels to the elf’s capital to be trained; here he discovers another Dragon Rider and dragon, Oromis and Glaedr. It is Eragon’s destiny to stop the dark king Galbatorix. He finds his half brother Murtagh and he learns that Brom is really his father. Murtagh is captured by the king, before Eragon knows he is his half brother and after they have become good friend. His masters are killed by Murtagh at Gil’ead… The last book hasn’t been published yet so for how it finishes...

Wyrda

The pain and anger in Brom’s heart were still as strong as the day in which he had lost his beloved Saphira. He had a new plan. He was going to have revenge on the one who had torn part of his being away. All he had to do was wait for her to come back, to show herself to him. Brom was going to seduce Morzan’s love, and then… Do what was needed to be done. That had been before he had unexpectedly fallen deeply in love with Selena, Morzan’s Black Hand and lover. In the short time when Selena was at the estate they would show their love for each other, in whatever way they could.

After three years of being the gardener in the castle gardens, Brom left. He had received news from the Varden that a scholar in Teirm had discovered some important information about Galbatorix’s palace in Uru’baen. Information that would hopefully help them to steal the last three dragon eggs. So after making excuses to the other servants of Morzan, Brom gathered his belongings and horse. He rode up the Spine mountain range and then on to the port city of Teirm. It took three days for Brom to arrive in Teirm, as he had to avoid the king’s men every few leagues. Then he had to find Joed, the Scholar. The two men had quickly become good friends.

The information Joed had was indeed very useful. He had discovered a secret entrance to Galbatorix’s castle, through some ancient elven tunnels - tunnels that had been long forgotten by everything other than the ancient plans and books that the scholar had somehow managed to obtain. They had then hired a man, who had promised alliance, to secretly enter the castle and steal the dragon eggs back from the King. Unfortunately things hadn’t quite gone to plan. Hefring, the man that had been hired to get the eggs, had only got one of the eggs and then he had run off. He ran from both the empire and the Varden.

Angery and annoyed, Brom and Joed went in chase of the man, hoping to get the dragon egg back before Morzan got it. When they eventually found him Hefring was dead, by the hand of Morzan, who now had the dragon egg. Gil’ead was alive with the sounds of battle. Brom had only three things on his mind; one get the egg; two kill Morzan; and three go and get Selena to take her hand in marriage. He and Joed had become separated. Brom now faced Morzan, his old idol. The rider who had killed his Dragon, Saphira. The man who had his love.

The swords Undbitr and Zar’roc clashed, sending blue and red sparks into the air. Morzan’s blood red dragon flicked out his tail trying to trip Brom, giving Morzan an advantage and he knocked Undbitr out of Brom’s hand. Brom quickly ducked away from the fatal thrusts of Morzan’s blade.
“Was it you that made my Black Hand disappear?” yelled Morzan.
Brom was taken aback. Selena’s disappeared? “No, I know nothing of what has happened to her!!” Brom replied.

Morzan charged Brom again. Brom kicked out, knocking Zar’roc from Morzan’s grip at the same time as breaking his hand. The two riders rolled around on the ground trying to get the upper hand. Brom saw Zar’roc. He shoved Morzan off him and grabbed the ruby blade. Morzan charged again, and froze. There was a roar from the large red dragon. Morzan stumbled backwards then fell over. Blood gurgled from his mouth and he blinked. Then he was still never to move again. Brom stepped forward and pulled the blade out of his enemy’s chest.

Then the red dragon was above him. “Kill me, Rider. Kill me so I can be with my Rider!!” the dragon said in a deep booming voice that filled Brom’s head. There was pain in the voice, pain that Brom was familiar with. The dragon stood still as Brom turned and looked at him, and with a quick stab of the sword the dragon had gone to join his Rider. Brom grabbed the sapphire egg, which reminded him painfully of Saphira’s when he had first been given it. Undbitr was nowhere to be seen. So Brom took Zar’roc sheath off its previous owner and donned it. Now to get his love, to see what had happened.
Brom arrived at the estate and forced his way inside. “Selena? Where is Selena?” He asked the first servant he came across.
The servant looked at Brom with sad eyes. “The mistress has past into the void.”
“What?” Brom yelled. It wasn’t true it couldn’t be true!!
“Just this morn…” Brom ran down the corridors of the castle until he found the room in which lay his love. He begged the healers to tell what had been wrong.

“No… It can’t…” Brom spluttered, figuring out what had happened. Brom went to Selena and knelt down beside her and whispered. “I promise I will not let anything happen to our child. I will keep it safe from the Empire.” He kissed her frozen lips and felt his heart break. For the second time in his life he had lost someone who he held dear.

Brom then travelled to where he knew Selena would take the child. And sure enough, in the village of Carvahall, with his Uncle and Aunt, lived Brom’s only child. After talking with a few of the villages Brom discovered the boy’s name. Eragon. The name of the first rider.

“Wyrda.” Brom whispered after seeing Eragon’s gedwey ignasia, 14 years later. “It’s cursed fate that makes me break my promise…” He watched as Eragon disappeared down the snow covered road towards his farm.

The Ancient Language

Gedwey ignasia – The silver mark of a Dragon Rider, normally on the palm.
Wyrda – Fates

Suzana's Reviews

FRIENDS

Tragedy 
TOW It All Went Wrong

The saddest version of the happy friends! It’s like I actually cried. A very touching flow of writing too. Had a familiar base to what the actual characters are like and so the dialogging among them seems to connect well. Even though the atmosphere wasn't what a usual friends episode would have been like. There is mostly joy and humor is those whereas this story took us to a more emotional level, I felt the intense connection among the group of friends. When Monica and Chandler's house burns down and they lose their kids. They move in with Joey and things seem to go back in time when they used to live like that. It emphasized on the point that life is what we make of it. When Candler connects with the ghost of Monica it’s a satisfactory ending as they both go towards the white light. Here it showed that Chandler had deep connection with Monica and that if she wasn't there for him, he literally had no life on his own. However, it was very interesting how only Phoebe could only see them and off course, this fits in very well with the fact we know that she is a very different personality so it did make sense that she was the only who could see ghosts. This came as a very good asset as she could communication Chandler and Monica’s final message to everyone else.

Overall, there some good humor and also connected very well to original source it terms of character and setting.

Crime

 My Really Weird Dream

This was the weirdest fanfic of friends. Basically, it was based on a dream of the writer which made almost anything possible. The story line had no set flow and everything just happens to happen. Like in the actual series Emily has nothing against Rachel in any way but here we see that she is planning to murder her and with her is Ross. Off course, Ross would never be part of such scheme as we see in his real character. The whole evil plan made against Rachel is overly exaggerated which she didn't deserve. Also it can be said that the part of Joey here is very suited, he comes and takes Rachel to Disney land. One would expect Joey to do such things anyway, being his silly self he is. On the other hand, it is rather confusing that he comes out of nowhere when Rachel is making a run from her murders. 

Overall, it was a really exciting story however strange the whole flow was.

Poem

 Ross and Rachel 

To every audience Rachel and Ross are a true couple and it seems obvious that they were meant to be. This poem is solely about them. It portrayed the emotional attachment they had for each other in a very tender way. I liked how Rachel says" I thought you were one of the weirdest guys" That was hilarious. The writer showed how their love had developed throughout the seasons and now their baby Emma is a part of their world. It felt as if the writer summarized all the seasons of their togetherness. However, it is not very evident that they do get married in the end. In this poem Ross is asking her hand in marriage. In the final season it was just that they do go back in a relationship and it was their last break up. They could have remained partners and not actually married. We are not shown what actually happens to them afterwards. 

Overall, it was short and nice description of Rachel and Ross's true love with a truly happy ending. 

Sci-fi 

Black

A very alien feeling was there to this even though the setting was in the city. For Chandler the situation was really way beyond his usual day. He was all bleeding and it stated that it was his wife that did it. And the real Monica would never do that to Chandler even if they did have a huge fight. But I liked the fact how everything was in suspense and was slowly revealed as the story went on; it was like hanging on to every word. It was torture really, but all worth the read. The atmosphere set was a little spooky as well. Like when the cab slowed down and all its doors were stuck. Then the blast of blood from the interior of the cab while all this while Chandler tries to open the door and get the driver out. Not being successful at it he falls to the ground and upon getting back up sees that the body of the cab driver had just vanished from the cab. However, it was a bit disappointing how the story isn't complete and just ends right there and one is left to conclude what might be the case. It could be alien invasion or something around that or about a beginning of war between humans and aliens.

Overall, it was well written and had a great story but the lack of details on the happening was the only down side of it.

Supernatural 

Magic Excerpt

A mixture of a bit of magic in the house. It was about Monica preparing for a cooking competition and now it seems that she gets all ready for competition when someone gave her "a look" about not entering. She is very typical Monica and is being very competitive in nature and it seemed that it was put to good use in this story. Even Ross and Rachel sounded like themselves. Chandler is a bit disappointed it seems that Monica had not informed him of Ross and Rachel's being present at their house as testers for her cooking. Also that she had also opted to stay with Joey during the competition week. And Monica's family was also coming over. Monica claims that she did not inform him about it because he had to be at work but Chandler suggested he would take sick leave from work for it. I think it was very nice of Chandler here that he wanted to be there for Monica and off course on screen the couple are like that as well. The only thing that was strange about this was that Chandler was made to feel out of the whole original plan that was made by Monica and he wasn't given much importance. In the end, Monica's spoon just happens to land up from the bowl in baby Erica's hand. Thats where the little supernatural part is, taken from the charmed series. Baby Erica just might have powers. 

Overall, it all related well to the original characters with a mixture of charmed but was not a complete story, it was left hanging. 

Romantic

Mondler Teenage Dream

Well this was a very romantic one. Everything happens in just one day which is strange. I mean a normally reasonable person would not agree to go out with a stranger to so many places and even on the boat in the end. It was creepy that Chandler was mean to her when she Monica texts him and then suddenly comes out of nowhere on her way back home and actually asks her out. I just feel that as a reasonable person she would not have really done that. And Chandler is not that “popular” as he was portrayed in this story. Even making Rachel obsessed about him was really something. What the original story goes like was that Chandler did not find Monica attractive in high school when she had a lot of weight on. And also here we see that Ross is one of her friends when actually Ross is her brother.  And so it was weird for them to be introduced to each other as friends. Things happened a bit too fast between them. Especially since it was her first day and If chandler was so in love with her then I guess he should have waited to show her then do all that in the first day, I guess at that rate their love would never have lasted, as it did in the actual episodes.  Monica seems to have been carried away too much with Chandler at this first instance.  He could have taken advantage of her. I personally feel that the way his character is portrayed in this story is not trustworthy at all.

Overall, the whole romantic part is all so nice but I guess the story should have developed more in terms of their relationship before going on to those moments.

Angst

How Did I Get from Here to There

Here we found  a very confused and drunk Chandler trying to hold in his feeling for Rachel and trying to keep up with Ross’s words of not eying another guy’s girl. He fantasies about Rachel in his thoughts as he is watching her sleep by hiding in her closet. It was funny how he said that he was “admiring her fashion” when she wakes up and inquires about his strange behavior.  However, this can be relevant to the real Chandler and Rachel in the series as they actually had feeling for each other, which is revealed in a private conversation they have when Rachel is moving to Pairs in season 10. And they have also known each other through Ross for a long time. So this scene in this fan fiction can be related to that fact.  Although, the story is not being continued and is left to make one think of what might if Chandler went on with Rachel in the way he fantasies. Which is vice-versa in the original story line as in Rachel once fantasized about Chandler once. It does seem a bit odd though when they both have good partners, namely Ross and Monica.

Overall, the story made a good connection with the characters and brought out the hidden feeling these characters had for each other.

Msytery

The Story Begins Here

This was a more high school setting. Here Rachel and Chandler are together and she finds Ross a bit irritating. Then before one of her classes her journal gets stolen and she is very upset about it. In a conversation Monica reveals that she is has taken it and then Ross comes over to talk to her. Rachel develops a liking for him and he walks her home and kisses her on the neck when leaving. I think it was a very sweet story and they way it is all put out. And I guess she was obsessing about Ross in her journal and Monica must have told Ross about it. That was why Rachel was easily irritated by him because she actually liked him. However, this story a narrative of Rachel’s character so we can’t be sure what Ross is thinking. However, Rachel does say that she loves Chandler and had a thing for Ross.  But he did happen to make the move which actually made it a very pleasant read.

Overall, I like how the content of the story is and made the characters feel at home and everything connected in well.

Hurt/Comfort

Lull

This one was about Chandler and Monica and how Chandler is seeing someone else and yet when she comes to talk to Monica he feels attracted to her. Just a reminder I supposed of what guys are really like and go about hurting gentle hearts. I really did not like the fact that Monica was so sad and Chandler was not at all responding in a caring way. Only towards the end did he actually try to console her but really he wasn’t good enough. I dislike this part of the character. If I was to make give Chandler a good character, I would suggest he be nicer to Monica. She has been hurt most of the time, first it was her weight and then her relationship with him and it’s just not very fair for her to always be the one that has been put down. She is a very nice and character however organized and bossy she can be. It’s like Chandler had to be with her because of her state, but seriously I think that she should never have been with Chandler of what a creep he really is when treating her like that. I feel very sorry for Monica.

Overall, I was very disappointed with the whole story line and it just set an atmosphere of sadness all over.

Horror

The Dark

This was about Monica, strange things happen to her and the she eventually sees this scary person in the bathroom mirror. Chandler thought she had been working a lot and hence had been seeing things. So he sends Phoebe over to check on her when she is at home. Upon arriving at Monica’s place she and Chandler find that she is in a very weird state. As if she was possessed by demon. She acted strangely and her eyes did not speak of her real self. But when Phoebe calls for Chandler to come in her body goes back to normal but is still in a weak state. They call the ambulance but are not sure of what might happen to her, or what has even happened to her in the first place. Well the story isn’t complete; it just ends there so it would have been more interesting to see what happens afterwards. Although it had a good flow and the characters mentioned were playing their roles are they were. However, this was a horror version so we haven’t actually seen Phoebe scared or Chandler freaking out as much as they did in this one. Chandler doesn’t seem to show much on his reactions in that much of a dramatic way as do the others characters so it was a bit hard to imagine him in a scary situation. Nevertheless, his love and care for Monica did come off well in this story.

Overall, well structured story line but would have been better if it was a complete one. 

Sarah's Fanfiction reviews

Adventure

Shur'tugal

This story is about the discovery of the last Dragon egg in Alagaesia. The first part of this story, the prologue, is somewhat unrealistic even for the story which it has come from. One of the reasons in which I think this is because, in the stories it is said that Galbatorix, the powerful king and 'bad guy', makes his servants say oaths in the ‘Ancient Language’ so that they cannot run away from him. So it is surprising then that the servant in this story is able to get away, with the kings most prized object and all, without being caught or seen in the process. As for the second part of the story I thought it was quite good. The author captured the characters quite well though there were a few things that were said that are hard to believe that these characters would say. Despite these things I think this is a good fanfic of the ‘Inheritance Cycle’ and I would like to read more to see what the author does.

Drama/Adventure

Second Chance

I like this fanfiction, as it tells about how Brom lost his dragon Saphira to Morzan. This is not told in the main novels and is an interesting idea to develop. I like how the author has made the younger character of Brom a lot like the character of Eragon. The writer has also added in the emotional moment, for both the reader and characters, of Saphira passing. Though when they got to the stage of Brom being in the after-life, I thought the story became strange and didn’t really fit with the rest of the story that they had done. Also they lost the character of Brom, he stayed as he had when he was younger instead of becoming the wise, old man who is in the books.

Fantasy/Adventure

Hope

This fanfiction is someone’s idea on what is going to happen in the last book of the ‘Inheritance Cycle.’ This is a good story, though the realism about the events that happen in it is questionable. The fact of the ‘character wearing a dark cloak’, the story, managing to steal the last egg as well as being able to rescue the elven prisoner from the kings castle without being caught is not very likely at all. Also the fact of Murtagh changing sides, or his true name, at the very being of the story is also highly unlikely. I thought it was a good idea though.

Angst/Hurt/Comfort

Change My Name

I think that it is an interesting idea to have a song in the story, for not only the character but also the story itself. The author has represented Murtagh well in this fanfic and stayed true to the character that Christopher Poalini has already set. But despite this there are a couple of things to question in the story. For example, the king knowing about Oromis and Glaedr. It is mentioned in one of the books that they are secret and no one other than the elves know he is still alive. The second thing in which I found curious, was the king having Thorns ‘heart of hearts’ I believe that it is also said in one of the books that Thorn still has it. I found it an amusing thought picturing Murtagh singing though I like it. I like the song chose as it fits quite well. The author could have been more careful with their copying as they included “Find more lyrics at .com!!!”

Adventure/Romance

Legacy Of Brisingr

This fanfiction is set in the future of the original stories. I like this story as it shows the initial characters when they are older and in more of a position of authority than in the books and also with new characters. It is well written and easy to imagine these things happening in the future of the stories. I think that the character of Murtagh needs to be looked at again as they have made him quite different to in the books.

Hurt/Comfort/Romance

Not Here In My Arms

I found this an interesting story. It brings in a dragon that hasn't hatched yet in the books, and it also brings in ‘dragon love’ for lack of a better phrase. We see Saphira thinking about whom she loves and who she will choose as her mate. I think that the song chosen was a bit harsh for Saphira as she is a kind and good natured character.

Fantasy/Adventure

Brisingr Edoc'sil

I think that this is an interesting idea about the early years of Galbatorix’s life. The fact of his parents being killed when he was younger is an interesting idea as to the cause of his anger in the future. Though the idea of them being killed my the Razac is interesting as they are his allies in the future and do a lot of his ‘dirty work’ for him. It’s a good story and I would like to know where the author is going with this story.

Romance/Drama
Taste of Freedom

I liked this story because it had a different main character in it to the original novels. It was also realistic, as she didn’t just have an easy escape from the king but she was being chased from him. Though it is said in the story that they were in Gil’ead and that the king was there as well, but the king never leaves Uru’bean and this is said several times throughout the novels. The author changed their point of view at the beginning of the text, and then went back to the original point of view again. I like the idea of Murtagh falling for the main character in this story, though he would not be able to defy the king and not take her back to him. This is a good story and I would like to keep reading it to see what happens.

Humour/Drama

Galbatorix Interview

This Fanfiction is highly amusing. The two interviewees are not in the books, but adds to the humor of the interview. Kwapi and Maddog are interviewing King Galbatorix about different things within the books and the movie 'Eragon'. It is quite well done as you never seem to get the answer to the questions asked, they all get sidetracked. This is well achieved and you don't notice this until you have finished reading it. I think the character of the dark king is more dramatic than he needs to be, but that works well for this fanfiction, if he had been anything other it most likely would not have worked. I liked the intervention of Morzan at the end, I found this comical as Morzan is dead (this is mentioned in the interview). The interview was well thought through and works well.

Adventure/Tragedy

Missing Pieces

My first two reactions to this fanfiction were; one that it is awesome, well written and highly imaginative; and second the desire to start crying!! The author has written this story well. They set up the scene and draw you into the story well. You never know what is going to happen and yet when it does your almost not surprised at all. The whole scene is easy to imagine. Both characters are highly realistic. The author catches the characters emotions well, and you can relate to them. It is very much a tragedy as does well as one and it keeps true to this the whole way through.