Sarah's Fanfiction reviews

Adventure

Shur'tugal

This story is about the discovery of the last Dragon egg in Alagaesia. The first part of this story, the prologue, is somewhat unrealistic even for the story which it has come from. One of the reasons in which I think this is because, in the stories it is said that Galbatorix, the powerful king and 'bad guy', makes his servants say oaths in the ‘Ancient Language’ so that they cannot run away from him. So it is surprising then that the servant in this story is able to get away, with the kings most prized object and all, without being caught or seen in the process. As for the second part of the story I thought it was quite good. The author captured the characters quite well though there were a few things that were said that are hard to believe that these characters would say. Despite these things I think this is a good fanfic of the ‘Inheritance Cycle’ and I would like to read more to see what the author does.

Drama/Adventure

Second Chance

I like this fanfiction, as it tells about how Brom lost his dragon Saphira to Morzan. This is not told in the main novels and is an interesting idea to develop. I like how the author has made the younger character of Brom a lot like the character of Eragon. The writer has also added in the emotional moment, for both the reader and characters, of Saphira passing. Though when they got to the stage of Brom being in the after-life, I thought the story became strange and didn’t really fit with the rest of the story that they had done. Also they lost the character of Brom, he stayed as he had when he was younger instead of becoming the wise, old man who is in the books.

Fantasy/Adventure

Hope

This fanfiction is someone’s idea on what is going to happen in the last book of the ‘Inheritance Cycle.’ This is a good story, though the realism about the events that happen in it is questionable. The fact of the ‘character wearing a dark cloak’, the story, managing to steal the last egg as well as being able to rescue the elven prisoner from the kings castle without being caught is not very likely at all. Also the fact of Murtagh changing sides, or his true name, at the very being of the story is also highly unlikely. I thought it was a good idea though.

Angst/Hurt/Comfort

Change My Name

I think that it is an interesting idea to have a song in the story, for not only the character but also the story itself. The author has represented Murtagh well in this fanfic and stayed true to the character that Christopher Poalini has already set. But despite this there are a couple of things to question in the story. For example, the king knowing about Oromis and Glaedr. It is mentioned in one of the books that they are secret and no one other than the elves know he is still alive. The second thing in which I found curious, was the king having Thorns ‘heart of hearts’ I believe that it is also said in one of the books that Thorn still has it. I found it an amusing thought picturing Murtagh singing though I like it. I like the song chose as it fits quite well. The author could have been more careful with their copying as they included “Find more lyrics at .com!!!”

Adventure/Romance

Legacy Of Brisingr

This fanfiction is set in the future of the original stories. I like this story as it shows the initial characters when they are older and in more of a position of authority than in the books and also with new characters. It is well written and easy to imagine these things happening in the future of the stories. I think that the character of Murtagh needs to be looked at again as they have made him quite different to in the books.

Hurt/Comfort/Romance

Not Here In My Arms

I found this an interesting story. It brings in a dragon that hasn't hatched yet in the books, and it also brings in ‘dragon love’ for lack of a better phrase. We see Saphira thinking about whom she loves and who she will choose as her mate. I think that the song chosen was a bit harsh for Saphira as she is a kind and good natured character.

Fantasy/Adventure

Brisingr Edoc'sil

I think that this is an interesting idea about the early years of Galbatorix’s life. The fact of his parents being killed when he was younger is an interesting idea as to the cause of his anger in the future. Though the idea of them being killed my the Razac is interesting as they are his allies in the future and do a lot of his ‘dirty work’ for him. It’s a good story and I would like to know where the author is going with this story.

Romance/Drama
Taste of Freedom

I liked this story because it had a different main character in it to the original novels. It was also realistic, as she didn’t just have an easy escape from the king but she was being chased from him. Though it is said in the story that they were in Gil’ead and that the king was there as well, but the king never leaves Uru’bean and this is said several times throughout the novels. The author changed their point of view at the beginning of the text, and then went back to the original point of view again. I like the idea of Murtagh falling for the main character in this story, though he would not be able to defy the king and not take her back to him. This is a good story and I would like to keep reading it to see what happens.

Humour/Drama

Galbatorix Interview

This Fanfiction is highly amusing. The two interviewees are not in the books, but adds to the humor of the interview. Kwapi and Maddog are interviewing King Galbatorix about different things within the books and the movie 'Eragon'. It is quite well done as you never seem to get the answer to the questions asked, they all get sidetracked. This is well achieved and you don't notice this until you have finished reading it. I think the character of the dark king is more dramatic than he needs to be, but that works well for this fanfiction, if he had been anything other it most likely would not have worked. I liked the intervention of Morzan at the end, I found this comical as Morzan is dead (this is mentioned in the interview). The interview was well thought through and works well.

Adventure/Tragedy

Missing Pieces

My first two reactions to this fanfiction were; one that it is awesome, well written and highly imaginative; and second the desire to start crying!! The author has written this story well. They set up the scene and draw you into the story well. You never know what is going to happen and yet when it does your almost not surprised at all. The whole scene is easy to imagine. Both characters are highly realistic. The author catches the characters emotions well, and you can relate to them. It is very much a tragedy as does well as one and it keeps true to this the whole way through.